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[Zaush] Daddy's Little Secrets [unoffcial RE-write] (completed)

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Posted:2016-08-24 14:58
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Language:English  
File Size:21.82 MiB
Length:19 pages
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Posted on 24 August 2016, 14:58 by:   lordworgen    PM
Uploader Comment
i'm not who makes the edition

-Little_wolf: the other day i came across the original sketches on this comic.

that comic gave me nightmares (TBH) so i propose the idea of re-writing comic and reintroduce the the discarded panels, and make it similar to the original sketches.

i can handle the speech bubbles and text but we need someone skillful to edit the pages using PS.

https://u18chan.com/board/u18chan/c/topic/1131743#1131743
Posted on 22 August 2016, 03:21 by:   NobleSeven20    PM
Score +21
Not bad. I'd like to see more.
Posted on 22 August 2016, 04:53 by:   TootOnAHill    PM
Score +22
Onoing? Wasn't this done a little while ago?

EDIT: Nvm. Just noticed it was a re-write.
Posted on 22 August 2016, 05:12 by:   Chronic The Hemphog    PM
Score +66
Hardly a re-write if you ask me. The only thing really different was the first page about the gangbangs and stuff. Other than that, you just tweaked the grammar slightly and sometimes, for the worse.
Posted on 22 August 2016, 05:14 by:   kashiri    PM
Score +43
yeah i wondered what gave him nightmares? it seems to be almost the same as the original
Posted on 22 August 2016, 06:32 by:   robertsaltin    PM
Score +99
This didn't need to exist
Posted on 22 August 2016, 08:47 by:   catsithx    PM
Score +12
the one out now was ok but this ugh it didnt need to be shown
Posted on 22 August 2016, 15:17 by:   lordworgen    PM
Score +58
@Chronic The Hemphog
many peapole hate sam's dialoge and the blackmail undertone, so the >>>Little_wolf's idea is make sam's charater less douchebaggery.
And reintroduce the discarded panels, and make it similar to the original sketches.

@kashiri
just wait for more upload

@robertsaltin
why?

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a little shift in the plot

-Little_wolf:

page 7

a little heavy on exposition :/ this page and the next will put context on the whole situation with Sam.

yes in the original he was invited, but i tried easing in his presence because Chelsea planned the whole for a good reason (something to do with her cousin).

also no blackmail undertone :)

your thoughts?
Last edited on 22 August 2016, 16:02.
Posted on 22 August 2016, 20:15 by:   robertsaltin    PM
Score -67
@Lordworgen because it completely changes the artist original intent without improving the overall work. It also is such a small change until the random panels are thrown it that it's practically a duplicate. If you didn't like the original that's fine, but don't try to act better than the true artist and change their work
Posted on 22 August 2016, 20:36 by:   Tie-Dyed Ninja    PM
Score -52
"Rewrites" are just a way for people with no talent at either writing or art to pretend they made something.
Posted on 22 August 2016, 22:05 by:   epiq fail    PM
Score -1
edit, i was wrong
Posted on 22 August 2016, 22:21 by:   lordworgen    PM
Score +59
@robertsaltin for the last time, i'm not who made the edition, i just uploaded here; anyway

many peaple paid for the original comic, and they felt uncomfortable with the results. it's reasonable that someone wants a better vercion

>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
page 8

the continuation of the exposition of the things Chelsea know about, it's now revealed that Chelsea invited Sam to distract her whorish cousin away from her dad.

she got a little jealous :P

thoughts?
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also the last panel is done.
Last edited on 22 August 2016, 22:49.
Posted on 22 August 2016, 23:42 by:   glvdtr    PM
Score +28
really nice stuff, please continue working on it
Posted on 23 August 2016, 01:13 by:   Daneasaur    PM
Score -80
It'll take more than a rewrite to un-cuck this terrible book.
Posted on 24 August 2016, 02:24 by:   lordworgen    PM
Score +6
(completed)

Little_wolf :P
page 9

we are getting closer to the end :)

minor edits

fixed missing text
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Little_wolf :P

page 12
there was some negative space at the bottom, i had to fill it with something :/
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Little_wolf :P
page 13! i'm done (9 ^o^)9
Dane got mad... his poor ego ( >_<)

typo fixed ^_^
Posted on 24 August 2016, 04:56 by:   Anieu    PM
Score +40
>completed
But I want moooore D:
Posted on 24 August 2016, 04:57 by:   dragon695    PM
Score +12
Why is Adam Wan always such a drama magnet? I am glad I got out of furry when I did.
Posted on 24 August 2016, 07:00 by:   Jazzdevie    PM
Score +43
Well.... My opinion, less wierd and a slap in the face with cuck so I liked that... But not much of a difference, it ties with the other, and I agree the original was good and creepy
Posted on 24 August 2016, 15:53 by:   lordworgen    PM
Score +25
i uploaded the original sketches with the discarded panels, just for make comparison with the pages 11 and 12, in my opinion Little_wolf :P made a nice work with the ps
Posted on 25 August 2016, 04:34 by:   Sandthresher    PM
Score +89
I can honestly say I find this more enjoyable than the original, less asshole characters and more fun.
Posted on 26 August 2016, 03:57 by:   Nevarius    PM
Score +47
I really enjoyed this more. I hated the original dialog between both males.... It gave the comic a more light feeling, and I really approve!
Posted on 12 September 2016, 09:27 by:   SciFiMisc    PM
Score +79
Most of the NTR bullshit gone? Thank you, sir with some degree of self respect
Posted on 04 December 2016, 20:21 by:   Twitch Eaglehart    PM
Score -24
Not nearly as good as the original.
Posted on 27 March 2017, 18:55 by:   GreenBanana    PM
Score -11
The characters are STILL douchebags, though. It's still not light. Even with the gay stuff, the characters are locked into codependent, mentally unstable relationships that kill the mood, making it still feel like toned-down rape. God, furry cartoonists seriously need to drop the dialogue and the pathetic attempts at story. It just comes across as incredibly emo. "Samael" is supposed to be the name of some angel or demon or whatever--this tryhard fourth wheel nobody invited really drains the action. He comes across as someone's Mary Sue self-insert character. And the wife is just pants-on-head retarded.
Posted on 11 July 2017, 15:03 by:   Corv    PM
Score +18
i like the extra pannels
Posted on 11 November 2017, 23:17 by:   FrederikJones    PM
Score +22
@ robertsaltin
A lot of people found the dialog in the original was too... weird. Like everyone's too much of a jerk. This tones it down a bit. Not much... but a bit.
Posted on 11 December 2017, 15:52 by:   sal252    PM
Score +33
i would have liked this more without the fox character taking over the comic
Posted on 23 January 2018, 01:24 by:   israelhusky    PM
Score +61
It was a good edit, it made the characters a bit more sympathetic and just out to have a fun weekend instead of racing to see who stabs who in the back first.
Posted on 28 February 2018, 01:00 by:   filipson    PM
Score +62
arent technically both girls, his daughters?
Posted on 20 August 2018, 21:29 by:   RAE1    PM
Score +31
I like this version of the story. Thanks.
Posted on 13 October 2019, 12:34 by:   Maryu    PM
Score +15
Need More of this Artist my friends. Thanks.
Posted on 29 January 2023, 18:06 by:   Jenkitsune    PM
Score +9
Art 7. Plot 7. Sexiness 6. English 7. All out of 10.
Posted on 25 February 2024, 00:52 by:   Clan of Clams    PM
Score +6
not averse to the concept of a rewrite. I AM averse to very... Very poor dialogue.

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