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updated with part 2 (pg 11-27)

HAHAHA... I liked the drawing but the Engrish made it even funnier. Seriously though, it reminds me of Peggy from King of the Hill trying to speak Spanish to a Latino.

To the artist; It's alright bud, art is a developed skill and we all have to start somewhere. Just keep practicing and I'm sure you'll find you develop a form that you can call your own. As far as your English skills go, you're still better then 99.99% of Americans trying to speak Japanese. ;)

Base +2, BlackToxinWolf +6, stllchlln -6, Danchris +1, sukn +6

Don't know what is your problem with your drawing skills. Way better than some others'.

Base +7, BlackToxinWolf +6, Danchris +1, sukn +6

well, I see no problem ^~^

the artline is ok for being drawn in a paper...

and English is not that bad... it's a bit hard to understand, but not impossible :v

Base +5, BlackToxinWolf +6

story is cute and simple

Base +6, BlackToxinWolf +6, yupokamusi -6

Your drawing skills are actually very great, but what you could do is find somebody who would be willing to run through your english dialog and refine it a bit for you. Just keep it up and you'll get better!

Base +6, BlackToxinWolf +6, MSTGMA +7, Danchris +1, sukn +6

the language offsets me...

Base +8, BlackToxinWolf +6, sukn -6

This is traced pretty unashamedly.

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