Wo-chan is happy cos he gets to fuck himself today
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Does that shark head has a name in the game?

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Now I wish they would let us just destroy Wo-chan's hat thing and recruit her as one of our waifu...

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P. 3, "forsaken" is not a verb. "Forsake" is, but the past tense is "forsook", and unless you want WoHat to sound all Olde English on you, I'd suggest changing it to "forgot" or "abandoned". Also, from context it sounds like the sense of the expression has been reversed, i.e "those people who abandoned you" instead of "those people you abandoned", although the way it is now isn't outside the realm of possibility.

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@Dusksymphony
After searching some dictionary and grammar sites, I'll concede that "forsaken" is not merely an adjective, but the past participle form of forsake. I object to the statement that its use was "proper", though. Compare to the more familiar verb "to break"/"broke"/"broken".

"This is the tile he broke when he fell." <-> "They are those people you forsook after you sunk." = Correct
"This is the tile that was broken when he fell." <-> "They are those people that were forsaken after you sunk." = Correct
"This is the tile he broken after he fell." <-> "They are those people you forsaken after you sunk." = Wrong

Grammar Nazis. Sucking the fun out of things since the dawn of time.

Last edited on 15 September 2016, 01:56.

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Good post :)

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nice but too short
(*´∀`)

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@Arkper Forsaken is a transitive verb, and its use was proper although the grammar was a bit messed up, as the sentence should have read "Those people you had forsaken after you sank" or if the translator wants it to sound a bit weirder, "After you had sunk"

In the context of the sentence, the Wo-class shark head thing is insisting she ran away after she was sunk, not that her fleet and admiral had abandoned her.

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