Hinata is interested in spicing up her and Naruto's newly wed love life and have a dinner party with their best friends Sasuke and Sakura.

WIP

Fuck this sasuhina garbage

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That terrible Hinata drawing. Dear god.

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so is this just sasuhina or is narusaku gonna show up. maybe ending in an orgy.

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nigga...them faces is on some derpy shit right there

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yeah, bit of a shame too, cause i like the idea

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Well that happened.

Too much lipstick.

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this artist made the characters look retarded

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this is just Trash Sasuke x Hinata ist nothing more than OoC crack

Hinata would never Betray Naruto and her Drawing is awful

Hinata would never akt like this she is not Bitch
this Bullshit is form someone that dont know antything Naruto and the Charakters

deal with it NaruHina is Canon SasuSaku is canon

just Look at the rating ist says all

Last edited on 28 September 2015, 10:48.

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Interesting, I hope you continue it soon. :)

I know I'm going to get a lot of hate for this comment, but I hope to see tons of naughty action between Hinata and Sasuke in this story. In fact I sort of hope, Sasuke ends up fucking Hinata better than Naruto can, which have Hinata seeking Sasuke's duck more often. XD

Last edited on 27 September 2015, 07:11.

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Newly wed? How ,there's pre-teen children?

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The person who made this deserves to have theirs hands chopped off and locked away and this isn't coming from a NaruHina fan it's coming from someone who appreciates good art and story and hates people who think they can get away for allowing this shit to exist.

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Hey everyone, I am reading the comments and I appreciate the critiques...no matter how terrifying they may be. And even though I am opening myself up to massive trolling right now, if you could let me know why you guys don't like it so much, I can improve upon it and hopefully make it better :)

So far I understand that you don't like the character designs and the art could be better. Anything else or could you elaborate so I know what to fix?

Thanks

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@Sweetcheeks12353, as long as you keep Hinata wanting to bang Sasuke hence it was her idea schtick you'll never get above one star no matter how much you fix the art. That's just the way it is and it's doomed anyways once you put out page 10 and show them getting it on. Try drawing a manga about birds next time, you'll get a better response than this heap.

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You cant please everyone cheek.
I thought some scenes were amusing, especially sasukes arm angst and the whats that banging.
Reveal Slut hina.

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sweet just go on, art changes as people get mor experienced, just made more and more stories and the art will change if you try to improve, and for the story, hey its something new.

keep up the work *thums up*

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@ Sweetcheeks12353 I think you should've drawn something more relatable to start. You chose a popular series like Naruto but the characters barely look anything like people are used to, and act nothing like them. So now there's people wanting something closer to the original series that are upset.

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@gagster I think you're right. For the next one I'll just keep everything Kishimoto looking and use a lot more references and keep the characters a bit more true to their origins.

edit: Also I've seen a lot of people don't like WIPs here, they want the finished product all at once so I'm going to update this one until it's finished and then for my next comic just wait and submit it all together.

Last edited on 28 September 2015, 23:13.

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that is the most retarded looking naruto ive ever seen...

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People care way too much about Naruto ships.

Personally I like the pretense of both of Sweetcheeks works; the swinging in this one and the arranged breeding partners set up in Hot Hinata, but the bad art, slow progress, unnecessary side stories and inconsistent delivery (why start this when the other work isn't finished) puts me off.

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I apologize for my immaturity before really and truely I just hate sasuke but in all honesty you need to work on your art it's not the worst I've seen but it's not the best either that's all

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i'm not usually comment about bad artwork.....but that Naruto face makes me wanna punch the screen really hard...

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There's an NTR with Yuno Gasai that has more stars than this, and I feel that has to be saying something. I don't mind the art at all it's just that Hinata, and Sasgay are way out of character.

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@Frocious

Can you be a bit more specific? Is it how I draw the characters or anatomy or resemblance to the characters? I know some things are off, but it's hard sometimes as the artist to see these things so getting feedback really helps :) Thank you though for the criticisms

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People think this is out of character for them, but then praise Karakishis work where Sakura and Sarada are basically sex slaves. They have a problem with the pairings, not the actual quality.

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Lol, I think there's something to say about having one of the lowest rated works on the site. I don't think I could have pulled that off if I tried lol.

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The characters look nothing like they should and there's no consistency in your art everything looks pretty blotchy like you just hastily scribbled this up as a last minute homework assignment

In truth this looks like a no name comic that you poorly edited to look like the naruto franchise

Anatomy is your biggest draw back

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yup, honestly the artwork is the only problem. Ignore the shippers, the story can be whatever content you want. That kind of thing is pretty subjective, some will like it, some wont. However, the artwork is objective. Personally i think when going off another series you should make it as accurate as possible to the source material. All that being said, its like anything else, gotta practice. I do hope you keep working on it, even though people can be rough.

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o man, you suck

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Awesome job. Don't care about haters ^^

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That's It ? Typical Gringo Author. Doing something more elaborated and with better taste is too much for your little brain.

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I regret ever making this lol, live and learn though

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