Doujin que j'ai créer, en fesant un mélange entre Ranma et Claymore, avec ma protagoniste principale, Rancolina Chan, jeune fille, qui est la sosie de Ranma Chan, et mon antagoniste la cruelle Mistress demonesse, Tanya, art femdom, chantage, menaces de mort, humiliation, torture, un peu de gore, d'humour troll et malsain, et le grand classique, tentacules ...

Doujin that I created, making a mix between Ranma and Claymore, my main protagonist, Rancolina Chan, girl, which is the double of Ranma Chan, and my antagonist cruel Mistress demonesse, Tanya, femdom art, blackmail, death threats, humiliation, torture, a little gore, to troll and unhealthy humor, and classic, tentacles ...

MOUA HA HA HA HA HA !

MOUA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA !

MOUA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA ! :DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD

(version française)


Quelque part, dans l'Europe du Moyen-âge, dans une région reculée et isolée dans une vallée. Rêgne d'une main de fer, une puissante démonesse, nommée Tanya. C'est une femme dont la puissance, n'a d'égal, que sa cruauté, fière et indépendante, elle s'est écartée des autres démons, et refuse de servir la cause, de l'un des trois abyssaux, et a forgé son propre royaume. Elle tiens les démons a distance des villagois, mais leur impose un terrible tribu, et ceux qui ne peuvent payer, sont massacrés sans pitié, la jeune Rancolina Chan, vit avec ses grands-parents, qui désormais âgés, et de plus en plus faibles, ne peuvent plus payer le tribu. La jeune fille, s'est proposée d'offrir ses services comme servante, et se rends au château, pour proposer sa demande ...

(Serviteur demon)
Mistress Tanya, cette jeune fille, est venue se présenter au château. Elle insiste, pour vous parler, c'est au sujet du tribu, elle dit qu'elle a une proposition à vous faire.

(Mistress Tanya)
Bien, faites là entrer, et fermer les portes, je ne veux pas être dérangée, quand à toi jeune fille, j'espère que tu ne m'as pas dérangée pour rien, présente toi, et dis-moi ce que tu veux !

(Rancolina Chan)
Elle ... elle est vraiment impressionnante, elle me fait peur, mais je dois être courageuse.

Je... je suis désolée de vous déranger, je me nomme Rancolina Chan, si je suis venue, c'est à cause de mes grands-parents, nous vivons seuls, et comme ils sont âgés, ils sont de plus en plus faibles, et ne peuvent plus travailler comme les autres villagois, çela devient impossible de payer votre tribu, c'est pourquoi je vous propose de devenir votre servante, pour vous payer. Je sais faire plein de choses, je sais faire la cuisine, le ménage, la lessive, l'agriculture, je suis une fille obéissante et discrete. S'il vous plaît maitresse, ayez pitié pour mes grands-parents, ils sont ma seule famille.

(Mistress Tanya)
Comme, c'est amusant, qu'est ce qui t'as fait croire que j'avais besoins d'une servante, et franchement, tu t'est regardée ? tu semble si misérable et pouilleuse, comment as-tu pû croire que j'accepterais, une telle demande, je me moque de tes grands-parents, si vous ne pouvez pas payer, je ne vois pas pourquoi, je vous épargnerais !

Eh bien que ce passe-t-il ? Tu est toute tremblante, et tu as le visage tout pâle, en plus d'être moche, et misérable, tu m'as l'air, d'une vraie froussarde, que veux-tu que je fasse d'une servante, aussi inutile ? Hu, hu, hu

(Rancolina Chan)

N... non, je... je n'ai pas peur... je ... je suis courageuse, et ... très bonne travailleuse.

(Mistress Tanya)

Oh vraiment ? Comment-ose tu me mentir ! Tu empeste la peur à des kilomètres, je déteste qu'on me mente, et qu'on me manque de respect, surtout de la part, d'une misérable chienne, nous allons voir, si tu vas encore jouer les malignes ...

Bien, bien, bien, quelle mort je vais t'infliger, mmmmh, que-vais-je découper en premier, tes petits bras, tes jolies jambes, ou juste m'amuser à t'éventrer, et voir tes intestins glisser, sur le sol ? Que vas-tu faire, me supplier comme une larve en t'agenouillant par terre ?

(Rancolina Chan)
N... non, vous n'êtes pas sérieuse, pi... pitié, je ... je ne voulais pas vous offenser, je ... je vous en prie.

(Mistress Tanya)
Je suis très sérieuse, petite idiote, et après je dévorerais, tes entrailles

(Rancolina Chan)
Non ! pitié non, je vous en supplie, je ferais tout ce que vous voudrez, je serais votre esclave, vous pouvez faire de moi tout ce que vous voulez !

Je ne veux pas mourir ! je ne veux pas mourir !

(Mistress Tanya)
Eh bien, çela fait longtemps que je n'avais pas autant rigolé, ma parole, je n'avais encore jamais rencontré de fille aussi froussarde et pleurnicheuse, tu est vraiment une chienne, amusante.

Bien, j'ai changé d'avis, je vais te donner une chance, si tu est une esclave docile, et bien obeissante, je m'engage à peût-être t'épargner toi, et tes grands-parents, mais tu devra faire tout ce que je te dis, bien compris, chienne pleurnicheuse.

(Rancolina Chan)
Oui... oui maîtresse, je suis votre esclave, je ferais tout ce que vous voudrez, je vous le promet

(Mistress Tanya)
Mmmm, j'aime te voir ramper à quatre pattes, comme une petite chienne, à mes pieds, maintenant répète, ce que tu dois dire à ta mistresse, pleurnicheuse.

(Rancolina Chan)
Oui... oui, mistress, je... je suis une sale petite chienne, une pauvre petite merde, qui pleurniche comme un bébé, s'il vous plaît, punnissez-moi, humilier-moi, insulter-moi, je ... je suis une fille moche, stupide et inutile, punissez ma sale petite chatte, et mon sale petit cul, Mistress.

(Mistress Tanya)
Très, bien, et maintenant, lèche mes bottes, esclave !

Oui comme ça, léche, léche, comme un chien, tu aime ça, pas vrai, sale petite chienne !

Coming soon? How about never!

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Take the hint you bad joke of an artist.

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Sorry but you must be delusional if you think your "work" is any good.

Base +7, highmoon +6, Zelinko +8, Deepestheart +2, Volttekka +6, metalgearkhan +4, takemeaway +6, CheshireSquirrel +7, TITSorGTFO +6, Watanogiku +11, hacklol +6, Mikle3000 -6, EchoCrest +6, and 14 more...

Ok, besides the point that your art is not good, (because it isn't) what's up with those text boxes? They are huge yet the font size is so tiny is unreadable.

Base +6, Zelinko +8, Volttekka +6, CheshireSquirrel +7, getalife +6, hacklol +6, @43883 +34, EchoCrest +6, Jackal13 +7, TITSorGTFO +6, Zeikfried +13, Kingarthur2 +2, Podarok +10, and 8 more...

So much potential, but not my cup of tea. These comments are really getting out of hand.

Base +20, Volttekka -6, @43883 +34, Ilyia -7, CrinkleQueen -5, Kingarthur2 -2, antikv +8, tazi84110 +7, PoeGhost +6, PersonaFan08 +16

"civilized person"

civilized person in a page full of porn ay lmao

Base +6, Volttekka +6, takemeaway +6, Mikle3000 -6, antikv +8, tazi84110 +7, sunshineandlolipops +11, Mantama +9

ok, even tho this gallery is poorly made I did get a good giggle from it..... mostly camer here to see the posts about it., also , the poster said doing last comment post , like 3 or 4 times in past... still re-upping this

Last edited on 19 October 2015, 10:38.

Base +16, Volttekka +6, takemeaway +6, getalife +6, @43883 +34, Kingarthur2 +2, antikv +8, tazi84110 +7, sunshineandlolipops +11, Mantama +9

Look, do not ask surprised when people hate on your terrible stuff. If you want to draw stuff for yourself go ahead, but when its posted on a public forum you better be prepared for the criticism. Also its just... really shit.

Base +9, Volttekka +6, takemeaway +6, metalgearkhan +4, CheshireSquirrel +7, Watanogiku +11, @43883 +34, EchoCrest +6, Justray -6, Ilyia +7, DrJackDaniels69 +1, TITSorGTFO +6, CrinkleQueen +5, and 12 more...

Look man, none of us can draw shit, that's true, but that doesn't mean we can't critcise other people's work. Forget about the people who just insult to insult, don't get on their level.
Your art is just not good, there is no way around that, maybe in a couple of years you draw like a real professional, but not now. Also check the speech bubbles and the font size, seriously, work on that too. And don't include tags in the title.

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ok this guy is apparently a troll or a literal bridge troll but i will give him his bait anyway. Images 10 and 11 the clitoris is upside down. That pretty much sums up why you are shit. I assume 11 is your age? because even middle school sex ed teaches you basic anatomy. Seriously are you even human?

Yea he edited the gallery. Still fun to feed trolls tho. I mean, how do you even make that mistake?

Last edited on 06 October 2015, 21:51.

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My not so dear 11angeoir, what is up with that huhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhu. What, answer me, my life won't be completed if you don't!!
By the way, "die with a cancer" is so 2014, get on with the times shitty artist. No wait, I have to be polite........

My not so dear artist, I hope something bad and painful happens to your hands and can't write and draw anything else, not even with a keyboard, so we don't have to feel ashamed to say, ``Yes, it was unfortunate but we commented on that person's gallery´´.

(Not) With love: negavamas
P.S.: The font size is still too small.
P.S.S.: Your art is still not good.

Base +6, takemeaway +6, Mrsuperhappy -14, CheshireSquirrel +7, @43883 +34, Volttekka +6, DrJackDaniels69 +1, Kingarthur2 +2, tazi84110 +7, casurin +7, Sher-san +5, Mantama +9

Okay calm down buddy, what away1213 is perfectly correct, considering he posted it on a version of this gallery where you hadn't replaced the images with more anatomically correct ones. It's still possible to see and verify on the old ones.

Base +6, CheshireSquirrel +7, takemeaway +6, @43883 +34, tazi84110 +7

Don't sweat it Gerhet, he will just insult anyways, he just wants his little piece of attention.

Base +6, CheshireSquirrel +7, @43883 +34, takemeaway +6, DrJackDaniels69 +1, antikv -8, tazi84110 +7, Mantama +8

I wanted more Claymore stuff, but not like this! Shame on you! Shame on you!

Base +8, antikv -8, tazi84110 +7

@ 11angenoir
I gave this half a star, not because of the arts (it's average, I've seen worst) but mainly because of the artist's 'holier-than-thou' attitude. There's one artist here (i forgot the name), he starts out with pencil sketches, the story is clear (incest love between son and mom);he asked for criticisms and TAKES IT LIKE A TRUE ARTIST SHOULD. And what happen later?In each updates, his arts are getting better and better, and even got 4 stars if i recall.

You can be a both a dick AND an asshole if you're actually good, either in the art or story (heck, just look at Shin-Chan. Is the art a seller?).

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@11angenoir
"I offer good coloring, good layout, dialogues, stories and popular"...You see, all of your comment is about YOU-the artist, not about US, the reader. Are you making this for your own enjoyment or the reader?If the first, then screw what the others say, but if it's the later, the LISTEN to what they say about it...since they're your reader. And of all places, you choose a hentai site for 'constructive criticism' ? Granted, there are some good fellows here, the rest...as you can see. Good thing you're not posting it on any -chan board...You'll wish you can strangle them. Stick to deviant art or other, if you want a better one.

Really, i don't criticize your arts, stories etc. It's your personality that somehow turned 180 degree. Just look at your comments on your previous galleries. Although those got one stars, you handle it better, you even handle a troll politely. But this gallery?...Do i need to point out which one?

Last edited on 07 October 2015, 11:04.

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Why are you pretending to be French?

Base +6, @43883 +34, CheshireSquirrel +7, DrJackDaniels69 +1, PersonaFan08 +14, CrinkleQueen +5, Kingarthur2 -2, antikv -8, tazi84110 +7

If i have to make a quote from SCP Foundation's page (http://www.scp-wiki.net/mackenzie-stereotypes)...It's the "Special Snowflakes" one.

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Good morning, do not take this the wrong way, your art is not bad, even pretty good, but there is a concern with the picture # 3, I think it would be better to increase the font .

Base +28, CheshireSquirrel +7, Inabara San -6, Kingarthur2 -2, antikv +8, tazi84110 +7, Mantama -9

dude just
improve your art
and then you post this stuff
shit it looks like everyone has a pompadour hair in all of your stuff
just
practice some more, man

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Omelette au fromage.

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I kinda thought this guy was some troll having fun pretending to be an idiot, but i am starting to think he actually believes what he says. I honestly wonder what kind of people do this stuff. Like, what does this guy do in real life? Does he have a job and attacks anyone who gives him any shit? Do his friends and family know about his "art"? Does he even HAVE friends or is he some kind of shut in? It would be almost interesting to investigate if it didn't keep interfering with my porn.

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" You are pigs, and I do not throw pearls to pigs."

No, you throw shitty artwork at them.

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Hmm, You already spoke whats in my mind about your art pretty much every single one. Yes, Your art was not very appealing to the eyes or to be adorn in any angle at all. But as a fellow artist I admired your for the will and intention to brought whatever you want out much likely. Still, You need a lot of work in practicing and distilled your "desire" into a "strong determination" for even a better art work.

Cheer Matey!!

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Idea and Story is kinda good but that drawing is horrible ;_;

Base +7, Kingarthur2 -2, antikv -8, tazi84110 -7, Mantama -9

"I know some are good laugh and take me for a childish guy, but I do not care."

You obviously do, for posting this.

How about, Instead of ranting at people for being harsh about the quality of your work, you focus on your art and come back to us when you've had a bit more practice?

People aren't just downvoting your work because they want to fuck with you. We think your work is no good, that is all. That's how voting systems work.

You can type all you want about how unfair you think we all are, it's not going to change anything.

No one's going to suddenly start liking your drawings because of how much indignant bullshit you type at us.

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There is only one word that can describe this.. this.. material???

AUTISM

Base +9, antikv -8, tazi84110 +7, Inabara San +6, CheshireSquirrel +7, @43883 +34, sunshineandlolipops +11, Sher-san +5, Mantama +9

As others have said, you definitely need to practice your art. I can tell there was a lot of cut and paste work done too because a lot of the body work looks identical in other panels. When it's that noticeable, it makes the product look like crap over all.

Base +5, Inabara San +6, DoctorBleach +5, CheshireSquirrel +7, sunshineandlolipops +11

Huh, can't tag character:kingseeker frampt.

Gne Gne Gne indeed.

Last edited on 02 November 2015, 04:48.

Base +6, taj1994 +6, @43883 +34

Thanks God we have japanese artists for fan works.

Base +34, CheshireSquirrel +7, crimsonkoba +5, sunshineandlolipops +11, @43883 +34, Sher-san +5, Mrsuperhappy +19, Mantama +9

all aspects of your art need a lot more work,I've seen worse, keep practising and you will get better.

Try to understand that most of these comments are actually trying to help you become a better artist.

Base +3, PoeGhost +6, Mantama -9

that title sounds like something from adult swim, like the aqua teen movie title, or something from metalocalypse

but from the comments, is this guy an aspie?

if so, to encyclopedia dramatica with him!

Base +7, @43883 +34

Please, for the love of all that is deviant
do not argue with him, it will just make him reupload this shit.

Base +6

https://e-hentai.org/g/871001/7a45af7088/

He finally snaps, guys. Leave the poor sod alone...

@Eiri
I have to gogotranslate your comments...But, yeah, i agree.

Last edited on 07 November 2015, 20:24.

Base +7, Sharangir +7, takemeaway +6, Mantama +9

C'est pour faire quoi toutes ces virgules?
Alors deux choses:
D'abord, c'est mauvais. L'anatomie est mauvaise, l'écriture est mauvaise, les expressions sont mauvaises. Rien à voir avec l'auteur ni la communaute, ce travail est simplement et objectivement mauvais.
Ensuite, ta réaction face à la critique. Tu peux soit la prendre à coeur, améliorer ce qui peut l'être tout en gardant ce que tu estimes suffisament travaillé. L'autre option, c'est de la prendre de travers, comme une insulte, et te complaire dans la médiocrité, convaincu que les autres ont de la merde dans les yeux alors que t'as de la merde dans les mains..
Dis ce que tu veux de la communauté, mais ta mentalité rend tout progrès impossible.
Bref, t'as encore du boulot. Du papier, des crayons, on se revoit dans 10 ans.

Base +14, @43883 +34, tazi84110 +7, PersonaFan08 +16, Mantama +9, Zeikfried +15

''MY BEST WORK YET''... i cant even imagine the worst one

Base +5, @43883 +34, InfinitySoul +6, tazi84110 +7, Sher-san +5, Mantama +9

Well that was...ugh. First the whole anime characters as actors in another story trope is hard to pull off and this person drops the ball completely. Second, the pacing is way too fast. Third, that styled text is a pain to read and should really not be used. As for the artstyle compared to some of of the commercial stuff (you ever SEEN the original Sailor Moon art? The girls have strange proportions that reminds me of Aron Flux) it is average. Finally, this artist seems to jump around never really finishing a story.

As for his little temper tantrum, well that got removed from here.

Base +8, Mantama +9

http://x-terminator12.deviantart.com/journal/E-hentai-community-of-stupid-pigs-no-respect-Ranma-576075273

If you want a good laugh, this artist made a long rant about how it's not fair people hate his "art"

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