6th translation I think. I've been really busy lately so I just got back into translating. While I was gone, Suzuya99 got translated so I don't think I'll be doing that anymore.
Enjoy Asuna Everyone

Fixed page 11

page 11 needs dialogue boxes cleaned and translation re-applied. Great work though.

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Glad you didn't use the annoying was kiruto KUN. Drives me fucking crazy

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Wait I'm confused, is Kirito a fucking scumbag cheater in this doujin, or is Asuna just being paranoid and imagining things?

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Kirito is the fuck lord in this doujin... except in ntr...

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I can say for a fact that the assumption of Kirito cheating on Asuna is only an assumption. But the fact that she isn't blind with raging jealousy makes her out of character

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They're blood-related cousins, so it shouldn't count as "inseki"...

Anyway, nice harem.

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@ UnlimitedBlades: Its not really clear. Page 15 goes: "Kirito wasnt satisfied" Like a narrator was outright telling us that this was actually happening. And then the next page goes right back to narrating like Asuna.

Ie. Limited to Omniscient perspective to limited perspective.

It might be just a translation quirk though.

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You have bad taste Kirito.

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It's kind of nice seeing Yuuki in some doujinshi... but I wish I'd find some where she's having sex with Asuna.

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Asuna, love, that's not how marriage works...

Japan, why you so obsessed with harems, cheating, and NTR?

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Do you really call it cheating when the other partner knows about it, and allows it? She seems pretty much alright with it all.

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Where's the cuckquean tag when you need it?

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Sounds less like Asuna being alright with it and instead settling with defeat

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