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[Hypel] Simpler Times

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Posted:2015-03-09 04:50
Parent:793955
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Language:English  
File Size:5.76 MiB
Length:10 pages
Favorited:4 times
Rating:
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Average: 1.86
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Posted on 09 March 2015, 04:50 by:   Hypelon    PM
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I had another account on here, but I've created a new one where the name corresponds with my DA account.

I don't expect a good rating (even more so with all of this self-advertising; sorry, I'm just trying to link everything together) with this. It's my latest finished comic, but it's six weeks old. I'm posting as a way to dip my feet in. DeviantArt doesn't provide too many comments, but the one gallery I posted before did. So yeah, I'm looking for feedback more than anything else.

(The images 2-9 are supposed to be transparent, but e.Hentai doesn't really support that, so I had give it a background that matched with e.Hentai's background so that the images could pretend to be transparent. I made a Imgur gallery with the transparent versions. http://imgur.com/a/os8zo/)

@wispylurkerPM Alright, I fixed that error; thanks for pointing it out.

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http://hypel.deviantart.com/
http://hypnohub.net/user/show/8331/
Posted on 09 March 2015, 00:36 by:   Hear7breaker    PM
Score +68
If you want some feedback then:
1. The art isn't very good
2. Needs to be more pornographic (Consider your audience here.)

This doesn't mean, "Stop drawing" it means, "Keep practicing until it's good."
Every artist out there, ever, put out drawings like this at some point. No, it's not good, but you can make it good with practice.
Posted on 09 March 2015, 00:57 by:   wispylurker    PM
Score +15
Its alright but i think images 4 and 5 and out of order as it shows character being tged then goes back to normal before being tged another image later.

Im guessing the plot is about a "flithy console peasent" however it feels like the story is missing a image to explain this or 2 between the fairy starting to argue with him and him being transformed.

Keep up the good work and improving!
Posted on 09 March 2015, 01:05 by:   Cacoethic Cavalier    PM
Score +18
The art is fine, especially for fetish stuff, where people tend to be more lax. Yeah, you'll get better with practice (no shit, Sherlock), but that doesn't mean you should stop posting now. If you "keep practicing until it's good" you'll never put your stuff out there, because it'll never be "good enough". If people don't think it's good enough for them, they don't need to view it.

I do however agree that, at least for this site, you'll want to focus on pornographic content. Your non-pornographic fetish material can live on DA, and Hypnohub will take pretty much anything MC related.

Anyway, your art is actually very cute and I look forward to seeing more from you on here and Hypnohub.

EDIT: s/you're/your
Last edited on 10 March 2015, 07:52.
Posted on 09 March 2015, 02:34 by:   Necronomicron    PM
Score -27
Down-vote this comment if you love terrible drawings and are HIV positive
Last edited on 11 March 2015, 14:31.
Posted on 09 March 2015, 07:10 by:   IGuest    PM
Score +28
I like that you're trying to spread your horizons to sadpanda but I feel this isn't really the best place for which you should advertise your work. E-hentai is geared towards, well, hentai obviously and commisioned comics that appeal to a demographic but are also well put together. It's understandable to want to have somewhere since DeviantArt is a hugbox when it comes to comments and standards are more open to casual artists. Sadpanda, however, is a different kind of environment where one can easily filter out content that they're not looking and even filter out certain star ratings. If it's not professional quality then it will be doomed to having very little to no views especially since sadpanda moves fast.

Now for some discussion on the comic itself. I will reiterate that this would be better suited for Deviantart. The art style is starting to show itself but it needs refinement such as better composition of comic panels and overall presentation. Practice, practice, practice is key as others have said here. Your art isn't bad to look at which is a plus and has a charm to it. It needs polishing really. Deviantart is fine with "mature" content and it's a training ground for if you want to get better and eventually do large dollar commissions of notable calibur.

Keep working at it and good luck to you.

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