Translation: This Shouldn't Have Happened (thisshh@yandex.com)
Thank you for reading.
And thanks to the raw uploader.
RAW: https://e-hentai.org/g/783948/1aaa1f775d/

edit: Corrected grammar and spelling mistakes pointed out in comments section.
Reduced resolution, and quality to an "acceptable" threshold.

edit 2: Corrected some more errors.
Thanks to everyone helping in the crafting of this release.
And I'm sorry for uploading so many galleries.

This translation is pretty bad.

Doesn't even have the two referring to each other by their proper names, Ice Cube and Kanye West.

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So I take it the lot of these characters in Brilli-Park are named after famous rappers, huh?

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Someone already tagged this as poor grammar, so might as well...

Page 2: "You shouldn't have come here so early" - Missing punctuation at sentence end
Page 2: "You shouldn't have" - double space between "you" and "shouldn't"
Page 3: "We had a lot of sex...." - ellipses only have three dots
Page 3: "But, today we should be careful" - Missing punctuation
Page 4: "It's because of Aisu-chan erotic breasts" - Missing possessive
Page 5: "So there is no helping it. Isn't it?" - I don't know what's going on here but it ain't right
Page 6: "it's pulsing inside of my breasts" - Capitalize the first letter of each sentence. YEAH, I NOTICED, YOU CAN'T GET THAT SHIT PAST ME
Page 7: "if I keep" - Capitalize the first letter of each sentence. This problem keeps happening, but I won't list it anymore.
Page 7: "if I keep doing it like this." - Sentence fragment
Page 13: "It's getting laate" - that's not a word
Page 21: "Nee-san are you here" - Missing comma
Page 21: "Istill" - that's not a word
Page 21: "Istill have work I just came for something I forgot" - Run-on sentence

Last edited on 06 February 2015, 05:40.

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@Dark Mac
I agree. This translation shouldn't have happened. Get it??

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But hey, at least they included the link to the RAW in their comment, so you don't have to look for it.

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@Hectotane

Yes, they are based on rappers

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ah so this is the aunt. Not an impressive piece. Should be quite a few doujins deserving more time than this.

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Yeah, you're right.

This shouldn't have happened....

This translation that is.

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A nice doujin but with a 2-star translation and at 196 megabytes for 26 pages there's no way that this is acceptable.

196 megs, seriously? That alone is just stupid.

Edit: has now been resized to 23.34, which is way better size wise.

Last edited on 09 February 2015, 13:04.

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A paizuri always deserves 5 stars :D

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I'm in the process of editing the grammar for all the pages, but I was wondering how I would go about reducing the file size of the images. Would re-scaling them down be an appropriate solution, or no?

EDIT: @Techwire Thanks for the advice, I'll reduce file sizes accordingly!
@instant_noodle Yeah, I will! Just thought people might be sticklers about the resolution.

I'll work on it and hopefully get it done before next weekend.

EDIT 2: Uploader fixed some of the mistakes, but there's still problems.
Pg. 3: "But, today we should be careful." - Remove comma.
Pg. 4: "You told me to get proprely in touch next time." - Fix properly.
Pg. 5: "So there is no helping it. Isn't it?" - Awkward. Change this to "So there's no helping it, isn't there?" Still feels weird though.
Pg. 9: "Feels amazing, inside." - Change this to "It feels amazing inside."
Pg. 12: "It's coming out, a lot!" - Remove comma.
Pg. 13: "Seiya doesn't come back until late." - Change this to "Seiya doesn't come back until later."
Pg. 16: Uoh... Feels like it's about to come" - Needs period.
Pg. 16: It's coming" - Needs period.
Pg. 22: "Ye.. Yeah. I'm listening I'm listening!" - Needs a comma right before the second "I'm listening!"
Pg. 22: "It's amazing, inside of Aisu-san. It's tightening." - No need for the comma and the bubble itself needs rewording. It's awkward to read.
Pg. 23: "Holding back from comming was hard" - I don't think I need to say anything here.
Pg. 23: "It's fine already so, hurry up and make me cum!" - Move the comma before "so". Alternatively, remove it entirely.
Pg. 25: "The thick semen is over-flowing" - Punctuation.

Last edited on 06 February 2015, 19:17.

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@Gordislan For the love of god, shrink them down. 1200 pixel width is more than enough

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To reduce the file size.

@Gordislan

1. Resize the image.
Image #5 is 4200x6000. Try 2100x3000 (Image #5 reduced its size by ~2/3) or 1400x2000 (reduced by ~7/8).
Make sure the proportion of the width and height stay the same.

The key is to reduce the dimensions of the image as much as possible without making the quality unnacceptable.

2. Lower the jpeg quality
For example, image #5 is saved with q=92. Try q=85, or q=80.

You don't want to go too low, or the image quality will suffer.
This doesn't have as big an impact as the dimensions or image bit-depth so you don't have to go lower.
One thing, try not to go above q=90. The file starts growing unacceptably large for the amount of quality gained.

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There is a doujin about a character who appeared 3 time in the show?

That's neat, wished she had more screentime she's very cute

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A translator/editor who takes constructive criticism to heart, fixes his mistakes, and reuploads?

Bravo, TSHH, if only more followed your suit.

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I can now say that I fapped to Ice Cube

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Is this still poor grammar even when it got fixed? Or is there more to fix left?

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Why is this tagged as incest? Kanie is right there in page 21. This is faceless self insert kun's story.

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Great, I think you did a very good work so thanks a lot, BTW I loved the size reduction, thanks a lot.

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That isn't incest. She's fucking some random dude who has no eyeballs.
Next thing you know some dingleberry will tag this as ntr.

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Ok, wth? When did Kanie fuck his aunt? This can not be "misc:incest&female:aunt"

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@Gonve12

please update the torrent too.

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FUCK YOU ICE CUBE

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I was confused when I read the comments at first because I had just read the doujin and had enjoyed it. Reading the comments further I find out that this translation and upload had a bad start but that the translator actually listened to constructive criticism and fixed their mistakes, then reuploaded. Very well done! Bravo!

This was a nice little doujin, a good side story to Amagi Brilliant Park. I'm glad to see a likeable side character actually getting a story dedicated to her.

P.S. Why is Paizuri vetoed when almost one fourth of the doujin is Paizuri? Big breasts too even though they are the size of her head.

Art 6. Plot 7. Translation 8. True to character 7. All out of 10.

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