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[wokurou wakacozy] Play at Dark [English]

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Posted:2014-08-20 15:09
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Language:English  TR
File Size:15.39 MiB
Length:25 pages
Favorited:14 times
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Posted on 20 August 2014, 15:09 by:   lootter    PM
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this is my first translation. don't be serious that thing :(
Posted on 20 August 2014, 15:55 by:   penislord1    PM
Score -15
stopped at "you'r"
Posted on 20 August 2014, 16:04 by:   lootter    PM
Score +92
Sorry about the language or sentence used. my English Still not good :(
Last edited on 20 August 2014, 17:42.
Posted on 20 August 2014, 17:36 by:   lapan    PM
Score +37
I think i need a translator for this translation
Posted on 20 August 2014, 17:52 by:   1zzfe    PM
Score +17
this's your jolly juice :(
Posted on 20 August 2014, 19:31 by:   gauron    PM
Score -37
Well atleast you tried.
Bad translation is still better than no translation: )
Posted on 21 August 2014, 00:33 by:   DJjames    PM
Score +3
Bad translation is better than no translation? No. Just, no.
Posted on 21 August 2014, 01:21 by:   lootter    PM
Score +12
well..if you say this bad translation. i want to delete it out. my bad.
Posted on 21 August 2014, 09:26 by:   chaos-x    PM
Score +112
https://forums.e-hentai.org/index.php?s=9d63e993571d712a69c32ab315281e76&showforum=81 ask here for people to help you with English grammar. Someone should help you with fixing this.
Posted on 17 November 2014, 14:05 by:   CarmeloAnthony    PM
Score +38
Still better than Laruffi.
Posted on 20 November 2014, 09:30 by:   Jay Low    PM
Score +147
Here's 12 mistakes for you to start with:
Mistakes ordered by reading order:
page 2:
1: "my name is meen Now I'm playing game with" | "my name is" -> "My name is"; Sentences start with capital letter.

2: "my name is meen Now I'm playing game with" | "is meen" -> "is Meen"; Names start with capital letter

3: "my name is meen Now I'm playing game with" | "is meen Now" -> "is meen. Now"; Sentences end with punctuation. In this case, I think the best is the "."

4: "my name is meen Now I'm playing game with" | "playing game with" -> "playing a game with"; You need a preposition because "game" is singular
4.5: "One day at my house" | "at my house" -> "at home" (there are alternatives depending on the objective of the author)

5: "One day at my house" | "One day at" -> "One day, at" Missing comma to emphasize the pause.

6: "I'm first than now last lap" | "I'm first than now" -> | "I'm first than you" -> "I'm in first place" | "I'm first! Now, last lap"

7: "Her name's pure, mean soft or slim" | "mean soft or slim" <- Missing subject ("It" maybe?) -> Sorry, I don't really know what you meant there.
7.5: "Her name's pure, mean soft or slim" | "mean soft or slim" <- wrong conjungation ("means" instead of "mean", probably) -> Sorry, I don't really know what you meant there.

8: "Her name's pure, mean soft or slim" | "mean soft or slim" <- Missing subject ("It" maybe?) -> Sorry, I don't really know what you meant there.

Page 3:
9: "Well ! Want to play again?" | "Want to play again?" -> "Do want to play again?" -> Missing auxiliary verb

10: "Well ! Want to play again?" | "Want to play again?" -> "Do you want to play again?" -> Missing subject
10.2: "Well ! Want to play again?" | "Well !" -> "Well!"
10.5: "Can you play soft for me" -> "Please play easy on me" | "Please cut me some slack"

11: "Ahh.. you'r cruel" | "Ahh.. you'r cruel" -> "Ahh.. You'r cruel" -> Sentences start with a capital letter
12: "Ahh.. you'r cruel" | "Ahh.. you'r cruel" -> "Ahh.. You're cruel" -> Contraction of "are" is "'re", not "'r"

P.S. Just take it easy. If you need help, I can assist you with posting a fixed version of this. Just send me a PM in the forums.
Last edited on 20 November 2014, 13:27.
Posted on 22 November 2014, 07:53 by:   lootter    PM
Score +6
Thank Jay Low for advice this translation. but I'm not doing translation doujin anymore.

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