For some reason e-hentai gives me a white page with "err" written on it when I tried to upload so this was uploaded on e-hentai but hopefully everyone will get to see it.

Btw "Machi" = "Town" in case the title doesn't make sense.

Original Japanese Version: https://e-hentai.org/g/722824/f4d34f35fc/

Much better job translating than the last one I saw you attempt. Glad to see the improvement. Not many grammar mistakes. Now just work on type-setting and you'll be really good.

Last edited on 24 August 2014, 07:07.

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I wish you'd just find yourself an actual editor already. :/

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@imaliar
...Thanks? When I originally googled typesetting I just did what this video said https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ktXbrfnlfpw
That's pretty much all I know on the subject.

@SCSS
What do you mean? If you're talking about an image editor I've been using Gimp. If you're talking about a person who reads your things and tells you whats wrong for a living then I'm not paying for that since I do this for free. It seems no matter how hard I try some people will just never be pleased since I gave this one my all.

@lapan

I tried to make it look as nice as I could. Last time I kept all the old bubbles because I wanted to leave as much of the drawing as possible but it looked kind of bad. This time I redrew them to make it look a little better but sacrificing space. I currently don't know how to remove the text and place new text while making it all fit and being transparent. And about the typesetting I don't understand what your asking, I put it in the middle as close as I could get it what more do you want? Honestly the color ones are so much harder but someone had asked me to do this one. As for the distances I'd just been eyeballing it. For refilling the bubbles how would I go about this? Do you mean taking the brush and painting it white? I think that would take a while and not look that great...

Edit: I'll take the brush thing and the ruler into consideration. I've been kind of learning this as I go.

Last edited on 20 August 2014, 17:40.

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Thanks for the translation!

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I didn't find this to be bad by any standards. Stop nitpicking everything, else just volunteer to do the work yourselves.

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This is my fetish

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People don't mean to attack you. It's just that by having you improve, everyone profits.

The main problem with your typesetting is that it's not centered in the bubble at all.

Also, instead of redrawing or even just filling the transparent bubbles you drew new bubbles on top of them, which have really noticeable edges and cover more of the art than the original bubble would have done. Other bubles are just partially painted over, leaving them transparent at the edges and white in the middle. In most double bubbles there is dust remaining from when you painted over the bubble edges.

If you can't redraw the art yet, it may be wiser to choose an easier work without transparent bubbles.

EDIT: Let's take page 8 as example. when you look at the very first bubble you can see that it is clearly not centered. The space from the top to the text is much smaller than the space from the text to the bottom. The "your small penis" bubble is both too much on the right and not enough moved down. If you have problems with judging those distances, use the ruler tool.

Rather than completely redrawing the bubbles it would look a lot better if you just filled the inside of the bubble. That way the edges won't be as jagged.

EDIT2: Yes, it would look better than the partial redraws or complete redraws you got going now. Just take a large brush-size. The raw even got a slight white stroke around the bubble so you have a bit of leeway. Just don't draw over the edges.

The best option would of course be to redraw the art, but if you can't do that yet the former is what should work.

Last edited on 20 August 2014, 17:11.

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at first I saw 3 girls
then I looked closer
and saw 3 dicks
and traps as well
i closed my browser tab
but could not unsee

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Cock socks.

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Who the hell care about TYPESETTING in doujin hentai manga...
Or where text in bubbles is... Really. I watch nice art and read translation. That is all. Thanks for the translation.

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at least they dont rejected him.....phew!!

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Some cute sexual exploration with a pair of futanari strangers. What a wonderful thing to happen to an adventurous crossdressing boy. It's so nice with a happy ending.

Art 6. Plot 6. Sexiness 8. Translation 6. All out of 10.

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