Translator/Editor: Kenren
YakuDou.com

UPDATE:
1. Cut off ripped edges.
2. Fixed typos.

The link has been updated on my blog.

>Everyone
Does the censoring really bother you guys that much? The girl is hardly censored, so what you guys are saying is that you want to see that fully uncensored huge beast cock? Well I'll pass, I'm looking in the other direction.

>AHTL
Thanks, i will fix the typos and update my blog in the next few days.

>lapan
Okay i guess you are just trying to help. In all honesty, alone, this takes me an obscene amount of time. So when people just point out all the little things that are wrong with it it just makes me feel bad because i really did try. I know i am not a very good image editor, i really really hate editing images because it takes forever, i just want to translate. The bubbles were not just gray there was a lot of different shades going on throughout the doujinshi, so editing it became tedious. An editor would be nice but they want money.. If its a free release like this then i don't know how to justify paying someone to edit it.. If a kind person would agree to just proofread my work then that would be nice though. Thanks for the corrections, i will try to fix them soon.

EDIT: Thanks for the information.

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@ kenren

thanks for the translation. though, the full censorship is getting pretty annoying. :(

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Page 20, "your."

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Thanks for the translation

@malkatmp
Going from light censor to light saber censorship is always the worst.

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I have to say, normally I don't care whether something is animated or not, but I'd love to see this become an actual anime.

Though the censoring would be even worse (personally I hate blurs even more than this kind of censoring), I am a sucker for The Wizard of Oz and similar stories.

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Meh, for a coward he fought pretty bravely...

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Wonder when this gets translated one day, see it translated the next.
I wish this happened more often.

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Page 8: "obey", not "obay"

Page 11: "divine", not "devine"

page 20: "you're", not "your"

Otherwise fine, good job

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Typos aren't the only problem, the wording is also pretty awkward. He also didn't bother to cut out the ripped eges

@kenren:

It's literally an additional effort of 2 seconds per page. There isn't even any art on the edges, which you could cut off on accident. The bubbles are gray too, in some of them you can see the white of where you painted over the japanese text. You do have good taste, but that is some minimal effort editing. If you don't use it already, you might want to look into getting photoshop and looking up some leveling tutorials. Though it's not bad for a one man group that's only 2 months old I guess.

Searching for a proofreader might help.

Things i would reword/typos still in there:

0008: [were] you able
two [kilometers]
lets continue [observing]

0010: the north's [guardians]

0011: to try and take [us on]

0017: it [doesn't] look

EDIT: Thanks for being a good sport. Looking up how to level images will help you out a ton with cleaning.

If you are mostly interested in translating, it might be worth it to think about joining a group as well. Translators are usually sought after a lot.

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What the fuck with this censoring. Lightsaber is the worst kind for that, ugh. Why it can't be just black strip bar instead?!
Thanks for the translation though.

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Pg. 19

DAT LIGHTSABER!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qzVBqBosf5w

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That's really powerful censorship.

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Excellent adaptation of the Wizard of Oz by L. Frank Baum. Look forward to the next, but that lightsaber shit is annoying.

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You are a gentlemen an scholar, thanks

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So that's where Konami got the idea for Kozmos from.

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