Claws in panel three
Incorrectly uses "there" and "their" on page two
Terrible anatomy throughout
A+++++++++++

Base +7, venomr +6, cakefart +6, braigartist +2, Varron +6

Chibiusa doesn't get enough of this kind of kinky action so I personally approve.
There simply ain't enough age progression / breast expansion art though I do admit that the bottom panel of page 3 is too big for me.

Base +14, Espom +6

My favorie part of the terrible anatomy is the first page last panel, where her anus is right about where her tailbone should be. Now all I can see is her pooping from her spine.

Base +4