"Colonello" was taken the trouble to translate my work "The demon of Gensokyo"

I really appreciate your help and hope you like the comic

Link
http://www.mediafire.com/download/1u4qpcyu8mw99qo/The+demon+of+gensokyo.+Chapter+02+Without+truce.+For+Tuteheavy.rar

wow so aesthete
exquisite so writing
totally suogii very the omoshiroii

Base +14, Techwire -10, BloodyRoses +6, superdragon -6, Binglo -52, mrsatanking -3

ლ(́◉◞౪◟◉‵ლ)

Base +6, superdragon +6, Binglo -52

I'm already creasing hard
fuck

Base +2, superdragon +6, FFFFFACK +9

What the fuck am I reading.

QUALITY artwork
Some Guy's OC in fanfic fighting Reimu for REASONS.
If I wanted this level of quality I'd go on Fanfiction.net or Deviantart.

Nothing in this works. Character Design doesn't work at all. The art doesn't work. The characterization doesn't work. The plot doesn't work.

It's a trainwreck and it's not an amusing one.

I just wish we could use the Expunge for being Trash again as this one's rather trash. Just leave this trash on your deviantart account

@Piruzeze: Christ suck his cock harder

Base +8, superdragon +6, BloodyRoses +6, Binglo -52, dantesan77 -1, mrsatanking -3, spikex99 +2, FFFFFACK +9

Thank you for your comment Piruzese!

It is best that the translator translate for gogle knew exactly what he told me.

I'm glad you think so. And if I still have much to learn and improve.

also note that several who told me that the English translation was wrong. I'll have to do something.

With the bad reviews ... for it is something that I can learn and make me strong to move on. if I get some bad reviews and leave my project and would not serve to do anything

And the final words of truth ZUN I rejoiced greatly, thanks once more.

ah, sorry if this is poorly written (gogle translator)

Muchísimas gracias por su opinión!
Lo mejor es que el traductor de gogle supo traducirme muy bien lo que me dijiste.
Me alegra saber que pienses así. Y si aun me falta mucho por aprender y mejorar.
tambien note que son varios los que me dijeron que la traduccion al ingles estaba mal. algo tendre que hacer.
Con las criticas malas... pues es algo de lo que puedo aprender y hacerme fuerte para seguir adelante. si recibo algunas criticas malas y ya dejo mi proyecto no serviria para hacer nada
Y las palabras finales de ZUN la verdad que me alegraron mucho, gracias una vez mas.

Base +6, dantesan77 +1, Flugerbla +5, FFFFFACK -9

Well, i've read your story since the first chapter in spanish and this is one of the best Touhou doujins i've seen. I'm not a professional critic or something alike, but there is a quote by someone that says "No one doesn't need to know how to make a chair to say this chair is good or bad". So, i'll say what i honestly think about your work.

Your OC seems well developed. It is not some arrogant guy with a feminine face for the purpose of being a deadweight character surrounded by sticky girls (ex. Bronte guy etc.), it is just about a character from another world who ends up in Gensokyo unconsciously and it is obvious that everything from this place is unknown to him and looks for reasons, may these reasons be either to understand Gensokyo or to go back to his land.

I found your plot somewhat unusual, because there isn't practically any doujins concerning political or economic issues/affairs (treated in chapter 3 in spanish), and sincerely, Touhou series could benefit from a story treating of these points, even these issues are more related to your OC than Gensokyo. It is a good potential that your doujin can explore very well, differently from the majority of Japanese doujin artists that have a creativity crisis because they don't know how to do any other story that isn't confined to either a unfunny gags doujins, sterile romantic doujins, or gross fetish porn doujins.

What doesn't help in the english version is the amount of errors or sentences that are confusing, for ex.:
"transladation", this word doesn't exist, the right word is "translation"
"I was told here could help me", it would make more sense this phrase: "I was told someone here could help me"

These errors would be of little importance in hentai doujins, because plots there have a secondary relevance compared to the graphic depictions of sexual intercourses. What is not the case of your work. But these errors mentioned above can be avoided with revisions, proof, verification of such mistakes. Edition, adaptation is also important to avoid misunderstandings, incomprehension or confusion. If necessary, requesting someone with a more reasonable grasp on english language.

What doesn't help much is your artwork, what i won't digress much, because i'm very limited when it comes of art, artwork. I find your artwork somewhat ugly, but normal. Many doujin artists had bad artworks as yours when they began to show/sell their illustrations/works for everyone, and they improved their technique while they did more doujinshis with time. Examples of these artists are very common to find: any artist that this ,,Zelinko´´ likes. With dedication, analyzing what can be fixed in your drawings, and struggle, your artwork has everything to be improved. And, also, is a matter of time.

Remark: A good advice is to never trust on the rating system of e-hentai, they mean nothing. Because it is very common to see stories that aren't hentai getting few stars or no stars, only because for being non-hentai plots. It is common to see competition of scanlators/translators, rating many stars to a specified group of translators, few stars for another group, regardless of quality of translation/scans, and the worst of all is many users of e-hentai treating the rating system as a fetish popularity poll - I'm not against/in favour of any fetish - where certain fetishes are granted automatically many stars as possible and certain others, few stars as possible: Ex.: Any tentacle rape/futanari/scatology/my little pony story gets five/almost five stars, regardless of quality of the stories, while non-hentai/guro/mindbreaking stories gets until three stars, regardless of quality of the stories.

Constructive critics, destructive critics, good or bad opinions, flattering or rabid comments, exist everywhere, on Fanfiction.net, on Deviantart, on e-hentai, on furnation, on paheal, on wikipedia, on newsweek, on CNN, on The Guardian, on Fiancial Times, etc. So, this is my opinion about your work. It is not intended to be friendly or enemy of yours, but for giving some advice for keep doing your story, because apart from the artwork (that can be improved with struggle and time - the fighting scenes drawings show that you have good will to improve your art skills), this work has an interesting plot, what makes this work more amusing than the many others that are offered in many conventions - such as Reitaisai, Kouroumu or Comiket.

I hope for the continuation of this work. Good luck. To end (the only relevant part of this comment), two quotes from the creator of Touhou series about the independent game developers, when asked during a interview in an anime convention last year, in Atlanta. It is clear that is about game developers and games, but i think these advices can apply for any manga/doujin artist and mangas/doujins:

"Q: What do you think are the greatest challenges facing Independent game developers now?
ZUN: I think that the biggest challenge in general is that most Indie developers don’t learn from the games that came before them.

Q: Do you have any advice towards any aspiring game designers?
ZUN: It’s a simple answer. JUST DO IT."

Base +1, dantesan77 +1, H-P -5, mrsatanking +3, spikex99 -2, miyazakehime +5, Flugerbla +5, FFFFFACK -9

@Zelinko: My god. You look like a child ... no sense to talk with you

Base +1, dantesan77 +1, Flugerbla +5, FFFFFACK -9