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Keine and Mokou

Base +8

Come on man put some effort into this! You keep just lazily keeping everything Left Aligned. Put some more effort into this. Center Align won't bite you if you do it and get a better font for fucks sake! That one's just such a messy font and it's a Serif font. Sans Serif Fonts look better.

Also this 'translation' is rather stilted (So where did you get this one from? Danabooru? Machine Translation?) with things like "No-, Wait-." With her cutting off so suddenly it should be "No- Wait-"

The color composition's always been problematic and this guy really needs to work on blending his empty area and he really needs to yet again learn to use a color sampler and use the fill tool to fix it.

He's been doing this for a while and NOT improved.

Base +11, SomeonesShadow -8, aleh -10, vicel -9, vBlue +8, wavedash +10, Auir -10, The Dark Write -1, SCSS +12, kserox +19, colBoh +2

Well,for a simple and easy fix: since you used the eraser or similar and left the white spaces, you should've colored the white blobs with the yellow page color using the tool "Fill with color" so it wouldn't look so bad.

As for font, it looks okay for 'this' doujin.

I think the biggest problem is the white and yellow color comparison that makes it look messy.

Base +9, vBlue +8, wavedash +10, SCSS +12, fifthfan +9

it's actually kinda painful to read.

Base +7, Letto Lettosa +6