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netorare
didn't see that coming...

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Incoming NTR whiners.

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Nice quality translation here. I'm just wondering what those black holes in some pages like 28 and 31 are from.

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Alright now I have literally just started reading this and I already see a huge problem with this doujin. Now I don't really care about Sword art online but I do know enough about it to know that the people that are in that coma are not in it of their own choice. Now I'm from Canada and that's a pretty good deal because in a situation like this where I was tricked into a coma The government would have to pay for my hospitalizations(Or should I say my insurance would but they would still pay for me if I didn't have insurance) this may not be the case in good'ol Japan land but I'd imagine it is. So I guess what I'm saying is... This is a huge hole in this "story"

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@MARTIANxMADNESS

Yeah, it's a big hole in the story, but I've seen worse in doujins.

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People sure get bent out of shape over NTR, no matter what side you're on.

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Come on, are you people SERIOUSLY picking apart the story? It's just because it's an NTR doujin isn't it? sure the story is dumb, but I mean who the fuck reads this stuff for the engaging story lines? I've seen Vanilla with stupider plots but no one calls those out

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Meh Why rage WHEN YOU CAN FAP

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I was okay with it up until the point where he had all those other old fogies rape her. That's really where I have to draw the line. Why did it have to turn into gang rape? It seems that in 99% of comics where young girls get boned by old men (a theme I think is pretty hawt), they just can't help throwing into the creepy fat man gang rape scenario: why is that? It's so frustrating, that there's a lack of hot old man on young girl hentai! And where's the NTR? Is it only "NTR" because of shippers thinking that anyone other than the guy they claim to be canon fucking the girl is NTR? Granted I don't know anything about the source material (and I intend to keep it that way), but I don't see where it suggests NTR in the story. Surely she's not getting NTR'd from an incestuous relationship (onii-chan)?
And of course, to the people complaining about the retardation exhibited in the story: these guys aren't professional story weavers; they simply write whatever they think is hot/will garner them sales. Complaining about the story here is like complaining about the story in a fighting game!

@jaylou1010:
Opening the image with GIMP reveals that there is a circular transparency over the spot, leaving the text hovering over it. In the .jpg, it is rendered as completely black (because .jpg can't handle transparency); In the .png, you can see the text, but there's still a transparent hole. PooShitmoe needs to redo this and get back to us. I pity those poor fools who actually pay to view these things on their website.

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I like NTR and old guys so this is fuckingtastic.

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@tentacle-man61:

You sound like a whiny bitch.

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Seeing Sugu whore herself to some old cock and get ravaged is the best! Love that middle school pussy! Why should some skinny ass young punk get all the rape? That's not attractive! Old men FTW! I feel bad for whoever's hentai waifu that is. She got owned ^^.

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Why so many noises here? Old guys raeping a girl bothered you guys? Or is it the ntr, which i don't actually see here? Don't come then. I don't bitch around when i accidentally entered a gallery i don't like. And what's wrong with ntr anyway?

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are there any others like this

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