As the person who edited the English version you butchered, let me make a few suggestions. 1: Center your text. Don't let it go outside the bubble. 2: Clean your damn text. Random splotches look awful. (10) 3: Redraw when you erase text over art (05) 4: If you leave some of the original text, make yours look the same. left-justified Black, then centered red, then black again looks awful. (12)
It is not that difficult: the English version of this was my second release. Try using GIMP.